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The Other Side of Paradise

Disintegration

Every day you come to me,

Blinded to reality,

As I recoil from your very touch.

I catch you drooling as I dress. . .

Your fingers trace a soft caress. . .

If only that could be enough.


You beg me to profess to you,

As if to speak it makes it true.

You beat your chest with everything you’ve done.

You’re desperate to assuage my pain. . .

I’d buy that if you’d break this chain.

My heart is not a trophy to be won.


Your sighs confess you know the score:

You cannot hold me anymore.

Your penitence won’t help you understand;

Obsession comes attached with strings.

I never asked you for a thing. . .

Now I can only sigh, “Yes, and?”




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agirlnamedluna
May. 9th, 2014 12:37 am (UTC)
This resonates strongly, I've had people hang onto me way too long in order to save me ... it doesn't work. I really enjoyed this.
karmasoup
May. 9th, 2014 12:42 am (UTC)
Thanks. Glad to know it connected. Sometimes what some people call "love" is a sentence.
ashgaelsonaria
May. 9th, 2014 04:23 am (UTC)
Nice.
Oftain people do not know how to let go.
mistearyusdiva2
May. 9th, 2014 09:34 am (UTC)
I know the feeling !!! I enjoyed this too even though poetry isn't my cup of tea :)
karmasoup
May. 9th, 2014 03:22 pm (UTC)
Thanks! Happy to learn it slipped through your filters.
bleodswean
May. 9th, 2014 06:52 pm (UTC)
I liked this. Quite a bit.
karmasoup
May. 9th, 2014 07:04 pm (UTC)
Thanks! It was a simple approach, but I enjoyed it.
mamas_minion
May. 9th, 2014 08:29 pm (UTC)
This was lovely and haunting. Obsession can be dangerous and tragic.
karmasoup
May. 10th, 2014 10:07 pm (UTC)
Indeed. Thanks for getting it.
rayaso
May. 9th, 2014 10:52 pm (UTC)
I enjoyed this - trying to hang on to love can be a sentence for the other person.
karmasoup
May. 10th, 2014 10:08 pm (UTC)
I'm glad you enjoyed it. It could be a noose around the neck, or perhaps even an anklet chained to a radiator in the cellar... you just never know!
halfshellvenus
May. 10th, 2014 04:12 am (UTC)
Really nicely done, both as a poem and as an entry.

Sadly, when things are over they really ARE over. There's no 'persuading' or willing something to go back the way it was.
karmasoup
May. 10th, 2014 10:10 pm (UTC)
No, indeed, though some don't know how to take no for an answer, and have to resort to more extreme methods, but no matter what tactics one takes outside the realm of those who still cling to sanity, real love still can't be forced. Thanks for reading!
eternal_ot
May. 10th, 2014 10:56 am (UTC)
Wonderful take on the prompt...Good work!
karmasoup
May. 10th, 2014 10:11 pm (UTC)
Thanks, glad you enjoyed it!
kandigurl
May. 10th, 2014 06:27 pm (UTC)
Lovely!
karmasoup
May. 10th, 2014 10:12 pm (UTC)
Thanks!
kajel
May. 11th, 2014 01:31 pm (UTC)
Nicely done.
karmasoup
May. 11th, 2014 06:13 pm (UTC)
Thanks!
penpusher
May. 11th, 2014 02:04 pm (UTC)
both playful and devastating!
karmasoup
May. 11th, 2014 06:14 pm (UTC)
I suppose so, now that you mention it... thanks for seeing it!
whipchick
May. 12th, 2014 06:27 pm (UTC)
Yeah, nothing like dramatic co-dependency :) Nice job.
karmasoup
May. 13th, 2014 01:44 am (UTC)
Thanks! I'm pleased that everyone is taking it that way. I wrote it so that it would easily be readable and relate-able to anyone who's ever been on either side of that type of relationship suffering, though, it also works as written by a girl chained in a basement by a psycho stalker who only wants her to love him. ;)
kagomeshuko
May. 12th, 2014 09:35 pm (UTC)
Nice.
karmasoup
May. 13th, 2014 01:45 am (UTC)
Thanks.
eska818
May. 12th, 2014 09:43 pm (UTC)
I enjoyed this - and definitely relate, both as a hanger-on, and as someone who has been hung on to.
karmasoup
May. 13th, 2014 01:46 am (UTC)
I'm glad to know it works both ways... I was going for that, so happy to know it was achieved.
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